what do you see?
Wednesday, July 4, 2007
here’s my take:
a life bedazzled,
wasted away
on the point
of aimlessness.
how about:
an abyss
for the sick and lost
with a 20-point
directional scale
folks, have a go, will ya?
what a contribution from this tag team:
Circle of life
wheels within wheels
on target
bull’s eyeShot fired
life arrested
a static goal
why?
Wednesday, July 4, 2007 at 1:31 pm
CS,
I liked the entire piece but the last line. I felt that the last line intruded into the classy style of the piece.
But overall, classy it certainly is.
Wednesday, July 4, 2007 at 6:06 pm
thank you for your pointers, Susan! i really appreciate them.
Thursday, July 5, 2007 at 3:46 am
Circle of life
wheels within wheels
on target
bull’s eye
Shot fired
life arrested
a static goal
why?
Thursday, July 5, 2007 at 10:17 am
absolute brilliance here, Absolute Vanilla (& Your Highness)! i am very much relieved that Atyllah seems physcially present here in our pathetic planet. Mankind could still be saved! This tag team looks set to explode for all to see! I am looking forward to it. Be warned, rest of the world!
Thursday, July 5, 2007 at 3:30 pm
thanks mr tan .
but what do you mean by doing well ?
as in studies or … ?
anyway THANKS for tagging =D
takecare !